That is so cool that you got to study abroad in Morocco! 2 things I think you did really well was telling the whole story behind your object and I can tell how much the object means to you when you smile while telling your story! Also, I think you did really well with talking slow and really explaining the object. Something I think could use improvement is maybe more eye contact, which is something I struggle with as well.
Angelite is a gorgeous stone- I also have some! I think your speech is well written, and it was engaging to listen to. I agree with Wylie that eye contact would help with the delivery, though looking into a camera to film can be a hard task. I also think outlining specific points, and condensing the speech may help, as at some points it felt like you were searching for words about the stone. Overall, though, I think this was a really good job.
Thats a cool crystal and it really does seem like there is a lot of meaning behind this for you. I thought you did a great job with your storytelling and keeping a steady pace when you were sharing the story. I also thought you did great with how clear your voice was, it was very easy to understand what you were saying. I think one thing that you could work on is keeping a little more eye contact with the camera.
Cute earrings! I could tell how much that moment meant to you and it radiated through the screen! I think you did a good job of telling the story about why they are meaningful to you and explaining how an object as simple as earrings can have a sentimental meaning behind them. Something I think could use improvement is the use of “um”, you only used it a few times but I know they don’t like filler words in speeches because I use “so” a lot as mine.
Hi Beanie! First off, I love the earrings. You have a really nice open style and I can tell that the object has sentimental value. You also maintain a good amount of eye contact throughout the speech. Maybe a little less repetition when you describe the person offering to buy them for you. This is also something I have to work on.
Those are really cool earrings. You did a great job with keeping eye contact with the camera and I thought your storytelling was great because I could see there was true meaning behind the earrings as you were sharing the story. I would say it was a great video, but one thing to work on could be slowing the pace of which you are telling the story.
I loved your story and how 2 important things in your life have connected through a dog toy! I like how it kept me interested from when you started talking about tigger, then your dog and then how they connect at the end. I also like how you told the story from beginning to end and didn’t jump around. Something I think could use improvement is having less filler words or breaks, which is hard because it is something that comes natural to everyone when we talk.
I could really tell how much this toy means to you! You did a great job at telling the story and connecting it to how it helped you whenever you were stressed or anxious. Maybe you could show the audience the toy when you start your thesis so it is easier to imagine. And maybe you can cut out the filler words like “um”. I know this is really tough to do because I struggle with this too. I think it’s worth it though because it will make the story stronger.
Hi Wylie! I really enjoyed listening to your speech. You maintain eye contact, list off main points with supporting evidence, and have zero repetition. After looking over the rubric, the only thing I can think of is maybe making your thesis more clear. But other then that, I think your speech is great!
Your speech is definitely well-rehearsed and organized! It was engaging and your demeanor was calm. I honestly don’t have much to critique in particular here, but I think you do a great job of maintaining eye contact and speaking clearly.
This is was an awesome video. You did a great job speaking clearly and talking at a good pace to keep me engaged in what you were talking about. You had also maintained great eye contact throughout the video. I had thought about it for a little bit and I seriously can’t think of anything different because you started it smooth and ended it very well where it did’t feel like you cut off the conversation. Maybe the only thing could be starting differently rather than just outright saying what the object is right away. Maybe say a sentence or two before you show your glove, but other than that seems pretty good.
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Hi! Here’s my link for Speech 2!
https://youtu.be/bSf0tcDAoaU
That is so cool that you got to study abroad in Morocco! 2 things I think you did really well was telling the whole story behind your object and I can tell how much the object means to you when you smile while telling your story! Also, I think you did really well with talking slow and really explaining the object. Something I think could use improvement is maybe more eye contact, which is something I struggle with as well.
Angelite is a gorgeous stone- I also have some! I think your speech is well written, and it was engaging to listen to. I agree with Wylie that eye contact would help with the delivery, though looking into a camera to film can be a hard task. I also think outlining specific points, and condensing the speech may help, as at some points it felt like you were searching for words about the stone. Overall, though, I think this was a really good job.
Thats a cool crystal and it really does seem like there is a lot of meaning behind this for you. I thought you did a great job with your storytelling and keeping a steady pace when you were sharing the story. I also thought you did great with how clear your voice was, it was very easy to understand what you were saying. I think one thing that you could work on is keeping a little more eye contact with the camera.
https://youtu.be/u9DJMRkQtF0
Cute earrings! I could tell how much that moment meant to you and it radiated through the screen! I think you did a good job of telling the story about why they are meaningful to you and explaining how an object as simple as earrings can have a sentimental meaning behind them. Something I think could use improvement is the use of “um”, you only used it a few times but I know they don’t like filler words in speeches because I use “so” a lot as mine.
Hi Beanie! First off, I love the earrings. You have a really nice open style and I can tell that the object has sentimental value. You also maintain a good amount of eye contact throughout the speech. Maybe a little less repetition when you describe the person offering to buy them for you. This is also something I have to work on.
Those are really cool earrings. You did a great job with keeping eye contact with the camera and I thought your storytelling was great because I could see there was true meaning behind the earrings as you were sharing the story. I would say it was a great video, but one thing to work on could be slowing the pace of which you are telling the story.
Heres the link to Speech 2. Please let me know if you cant view it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q1dZ68szq8s
I loved your story and how 2 important things in your life have connected through a dog toy! I like how it kept me interested from when you started talking about tigger, then your dog and then how they connect at the end. I also like how you told the story from beginning to end and didn’t jump around. Something I think could use improvement is having less filler words or breaks, which is hard because it is something that comes natural to everyone when we talk.
I could really tell how much this toy means to you! You did a great job at telling the story and connecting it to how it helped you whenever you were stressed or anxious. Maybe you could show the audience the toy when you start your thesis so it is easier to imagine. And maybe you can cut out the filler words like “um”. I know this is really tough to do because I struggle with this too. I think it’s worth it though because it will make the story stronger.
My Link!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qFN9-b7gN8Y
Hi Wylie! I really enjoyed listening to your speech. You maintain eye contact, list off main points with supporting evidence, and have zero repetition. After looking over the rubric, the only thing I can think of is maybe making your thesis more clear. But other then that, I think your speech is great!
Your speech is definitely well-rehearsed and organized! It was engaging and your demeanor was calm. I honestly don’t have much to critique in particular here, but I think you do a great job of maintaining eye contact and speaking clearly.
This is was an awesome video. You did a great job speaking clearly and talking at a good pace to keep me engaged in what you were talking about. You had also maintained great eye contact throughout the video. I had thought about it for a little bit and I seriously can’t think of anything different because you started it smooth and ended it very well where it did’t feel like you cut off the conversation. Maybe the only thing could be starting differently rather than just outright saying what the object is right away. Maybe say a sentence or two before you show your glove, but other than that seems pretty good.