Henry, I enjoyed your speech-thank you for sharing it! One of the first things I noticed about your speech was the peaceful background and how it enhanced your topic. Once you started with your speech it made me envision that you had just taken some photos, so I think it really works well with your content. I found myself responding positively to the calm tone of your voice, but through your facial expressions I was also able to detect the passion that you hold for black and white photography. I had two small thoughts regarding your introduction. Your introduction was extremely brief; if I wasn’t a student in this class, I don’t think that I would know exactly why you were speaking until you get further into the speech. Also, (maybe this is just me because I don’t have any photographic background) when you held up the object and listed off the name quickly, I wasn’t sure what it was, leading me to miss that you stated in the next sentence that it was film and then I had to rewind the speech. Perhaps if you slow down the introduction to emphasize these things it would create more impact for the speech overall, and you could still be within the time limit. I think you have done a great job and thanks for letting me comment on your hard work.
Hi Henry! Your background for your speech was very peaceful & the lighting was just right. Some things that could maybe use some more time on could be your introduction and conclusion. The introduction was nice, but maybe if you held up the object for a little longer while you described it, it could make it easier for the audience. In the conclusion, you could even just add one more sentence to wrap it up. I know this is something I too need to work on. Overall great speech!
I think you really nailed this speech! Firstly, I feel like you drew the listener in well, and were direct and very articulate. It was clear what your object was, along with its significance to you. Along with this, you spoke with enthusiasm, maintained eye contact with the camera, and had good posture and body language. I know we were supposed to come up with 1-2 critiques, but I honestly feel like your presentation is an exemplar. It is clear you put a lot of thought and effort into this speech.
Hi Candance! I really enjoyed your speech describing the object that holds so much meaning to you. I think you described it well, and even ringing it for a quick second helped gather the full moment a lot better. Something that could maybe be touched up could be slowing down your speech slightly so that you arent just jumping from sentence to sentense, but other than that you did a great job of staying in the time frame and making sure the audience gets a full understanding of what this object holds for you.
Julia, thanks for sharing your speech! Not only was your introduction strong, but also the narrative story technique which described how you decided upon your topic pulled me in-I wanted to listen to the rest of your speech. Your quiet and calm tone really works with the theme of your speech. I noticed a couple of small things that I think you could tweak pretty easily to enhance your speech. You maintain eye contact, but it seems like you are occasionally looking down at the camera a little bit. Perhaps you could experiment with adjusting your camera. I also enjoyed your last sentence as a wrap up, but it felt like your conclusion is missing something, like perhaps a specific/farewell or closing statement. Thanks for letting me provide you feedback; I found your speech creative!
I think your speech was very well executed. First, I think that your choice of a meaningful object was clever. With this, your explanation of a bed being more than a place to lay down was well said. I felt like the flow of your speech was very natural. You also had some repetition in your statements which added a nice emphasis to the points you were making. Like Candace had mentioned, I think a just a small closing statement could help bring your speech together, and serve as a nice conclusion. Altogether, I think your speech was really well done!
Sam, thanks for sharing your speech-I liked your bold greeting and introduction. I loved the guessing game aspect that you incorporated in the beginning of the speech-it caught my attention immediately. You also displayed a very casual, easy-going manner, which worked with the content of your speech. I did notice a couple of small things for improvement that I think could enhance your speech. First, you displayed a lot of back and forth movements, which distracted me from what you were saying. Also you had some umms in between words that I think could be eliminated through some additional rehearsal. Thanks for letting me give you my feedback and keep up the good work!
This was a speech I could relate to. You really drew the listener in with your introduction and the reveal of your meaningful object. I think your tone and relaxed attitude added a nice atmosphere to your speech. You made some solid points about an Xbox controller being more than just a piece of plastic with AA batteries. While you were speaking, I just had a flood of all those old memories playing Halo on my friends original Xbox as a kid. Your speech held my attention and was enjoyable to listen to. A couple adjustments I would recommend would just be around your camera setup and audio. This is a little nitpicky, but I think the chair you were sitting in was making some noise as you were speaking, which was a little distracting. Along with this, I would opt to filming horizontally opposed to vertically. From filming vertically, the camera made I look like the viewer was looking up at you, and a lot of what was in fame was your ceiling. However, these are just some small, superficial, critiques. Overall, I think your speech was really well done!
Hi Sam, I enjoyed the beginning of your speech where you started describing the object without giving it away at first. This gives a little bit of curiosity and makes the audience think for a second. Something that could maybe be worked on could be the camera angle. I noticed it seemed like the device you used to record was below you, and you were looking down sort of. Maybe if you bring the device up to a desk or counter where it can sit at a good level it would be helpful. Other than that great speech!!
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Henry, I enjoyed your speech-thank you for sharing it! One of the first things I noticed about your speech was the peaceful background and how it enhanced your topic. Once you started with your speech it made me envision that you had just taken some photos, so I think it really works well with your content. I found myself responding positively to the calm tone of your voice, but through your facial expressions I was also able to detect the passion that you hold for black and white photography. I had two small thoughts regarding your introduction. Your introduction was extremely brief; if I wasn’t a student in this class, I don’t think that I would know exactly why you were speaking until you get further into the speech. Also, (maybe this is just me because I don’t have any photographic background) when you held up the object and listed off the name quickly, I wasn’t sure what it was, leading me to miss that you stated in the next sentence that it was film and then I had to rewind the speech. Perhaps if you slow down the introduction to emphasize these things it would create more impact for the speech overall, and you could still be within the time limit. I think you have done a great job and thanks for letting me comment on your hard work.
Hi Henry! Your background for your speech was very peaceful & the lighting was just right. Some things that could maybe use some more time on could be your introduction and conclusion. The introduction was nice, but maybe if you held up the object for a little longer while you described it, it could make it easier for the audience. In the conclusion, you could even just add one more sentence to wrap it up. I know this is something I too need to work on. Overall great speech!
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Hi Candance,
I think you really nailed this speech! Firstly, I feel like you drew the listener in well, and were direct and very articulate. It was clear what your object was, along with its significance to you. Along with this, you spoke with enthusiasm, maintained eye contact with the camera, and had good posture and body language. I know we were supposed to come up with 1-2 critiques, but I honestly feel like your presentation is an exemplar. It is clear you put a lot of thought and effort into this speech.
Hi Candance! I really enjoyed your speech describing the object that holds so much meaning to you. I think you described it well, and even ringing it for a quick second helped gather the full moment a lot better. Something that could maybe be touched up could be slowing down your speech slightly so that you arent just jumping from sentence to sentense, but other than that you did a great job of staying in the time frame and making sure the audience gets a full understanding of what this object holds for you.
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Julia, thanks for sharing your speech! Not only was your introduction strong, but also the narrative story technique which described how you decided upon your topic pulled me in-I wanted to listen to the rest of your speech. Your quiet and calm tone really works with the theme of your speech. I noticed a couple of small things that I think you could tweak pretty easily to enhance your speech. You maintain eye contact, but it seems like you are occasionally looking down at the camera a little bit. Perhaps you could experiment with adjusting your camera. I also enjoyed your last sentence as a wrap up, but it felt like your conclusion is missing something, like perhaps a specific/farewell or closing statement. Thanks for letting me provide you feedback; I found your speech creative!
Hi Julia,
I think your speech was very well executed. First, I think that your choice of a meaningful object was clever. With this, your explanation of a bed being more than a place to lay down was well said. I felt like the flow of your speech was very natural. You also had some repetition in your statements which added a nice emphasis to the points you were making. Like Candace had mentioned, I think a just a small closing statement could help bring your speech together, and serve as a nice conclusion. Altogether, I think your speech was really well done!
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Sam, thanks for sharing your speech-I liked your bold greeting and introduction. I loved the guessing game aspect that you incorporated in the beginning of the speech-it caught my attention immediately. You also displayed a very casual, easy-going manner, which worked with the content of your speech. I did notice a couple of small things for improvement that I think could enhance your speech. First, you displayed a lot of back and forth movements, which distracted me from what you were saying. Also you had some umms in between words that I think could be eliminated through some additional rehearsal. Thanks for letting me give you my feedback and keep up the good work!
Hi Sam,
This was a speech I could relate to. You really drew the listener in with your introduction and the reveal of your meaningful object. I think your tone and relaxed attitude added a nice atmosphere to your speech. You made some solid points about an Xbox controller being more than just a piece of plastic with AA batteries. While you were speaking, I just had a flood of all those old memories playing Halo on my friends original Xbox as a kid. Your speech held my attention and was enjoyable to listen to. A couple adjustments I would recommend would just be around your camera setup and audio. This is a little nitpicky, but I think the chair you were sitting in was making some noise as you were speaking, which was a little distracting. Along with this, I would opt to filming horizontally opposed to vertically. From filming vertically, the camera made I look like the viewer was looking up at you, and a lot of what was in fame was your ceiling. However, these are just some small, superficial, critiques. Overall, I think your speech was really well done!
Hi Sam, I enjoyed the beginning of your speech where you started describing the object without giving it away at first. This gives a little bit of curiosity and makes the audience think for a second. Something that could maybe be worked on could be the camera angle. I noticed it seemed like the device you used to record was below you, and you were looking down sort of. Maybe if you bring the device up to a desk or counter where it can sit at a good level it would be helpful. Other than that great speech!!