I thought that your speech was very well organized and toned. You had good posture throughout the video and your pacing was great. One thing that caught my attention was the pause that you had at 3:14 right before you said “vastly.” That was well performed, well done. I don’t have any negative feedback to give, I think you nailed it. Good job.
Hi Julia,
Thank you for sharing your speech! For your delivery, I enjoyed the tone of your voice and the pacing. I think that you could add one or two more small personal stories about your mother into your speech to enhance it. Also, perhaps work on additional eye contact with the camera, because from my angle, it appears that you are looking downward. Keep up the good work!
I really liked the tone and delivery of your speech. You made clear the positive impact that your mother has had in your life, and I thought the way you articulated that was really endearing. The one thing that I think needs some adjustment is the length of your speech. Although I think you hit all the marks for the content of your speech, you’re still a little shy of the 3-5 minute mark. Like Candace had mentioned, I think adding some personal stories would not only enhance your speech, but also add a bit more time to it. I think this could be a fairly simple fix, by just adding a few subpoints with examples to your outline, it would help to prep and bring your speech to the next level!
Really well done. I liked how you began with a forward, which helped establish context and drawn the listener in. As for your speech, your tone and pacing underwrote the content and delivery of your speech, adding a level of earnestness –which was powerful. The only possible adjustment I could recommend is that it does go over that 3-5 minute recommendation. However, I don’t think your speech should be bottlenecked into this, as I think it should remain as you have it. Though I may have not known your father, I think your words hallmark his legacy and the positive impacts he had on your life.
Thank you so much Henry! Yes, I will definitely go back and look at my outline. All of those pauses were great, but it did add a lot of time to the speech.
Hi Candace! Your speech was very empowering. You were able to describe these memories of your father perfectly and set the moment just right. Your tone and delivery were very good, and the pace of things to you didn’t rush anything. Maybe you could just work on the length of the speech a little to tweak it and narrow it down to just a few of those key moments you shared? Other than that great job!
This was a really good dry run and a great story. I noticed for the better part of the video that you were very poised with your speaking and you didn’t really use any filler words throughout the entire speech. However, towards the end of the speech, you started to slip up a little bit but that’s understandable considering how long you were speaking for. But I could tell that you were passionate about the impact your father has had on you. Great speech!
Hi Henry,
I loved your speech! Wonderful content-I admire how you added realistic information about your grandfather and tied it into the conclusion. You balanced out your emotions with the delivery. I think that the rhythm and pacing were great. The only thing I can think of to improve is to perhaps introduce yourself at the beginning. You could choose so right at the beginning, or maybe after you end after the first few sentences “…one of those very important people to me was my grandfather.” At that point, for example say, “Hello, I’m Henry….etc, etc”. I think that mechanism could preserve your concise opening thoughts to the audience while also introducing yourself. Excellent work Henry!
I think your speech was well done, it covered not only an influential person in your life but also personal struggles which made that person exemplary. I also liked how your speech had a narrative to it as well, your transition points flowed nicely. When it comes to things you could potentially adjust, I think your background was a little on the long side. I think either trimming that down or introducing your person sooner could be more beneficial for the listener. Those are some minor adjustments, but I think this is a really good dry run!
Hi Sam! I enjoyed listening to your speech. The introduction was very strong and you were able to explain everything. One thing I would say is maybe you could introduce the person you were speaking about sooner in your speech, like maybe before all of the background info even a name would be good to add. Once you add in the name of the person whom you will be discussing then the background info might make it easier to tie in. The length of your speech was perfect you did a great job on that, and also the delivery as it makes us audience more drawn in and feel those feelings you may have gone through.
Hi Sam, thank you for sharing your speech! Your comfort level with speaking and eye contact were both very good. As Julia mentioned, I was a little confused at first due to organization of the speech. Perhaps you could first introduce Dante, then state how he has helped you (providing some small story for each point). I wanted to hear more about how Dante was helping you-it seemed like you were generalizing a bit and it would be enjoyable to hear additional details. Keep up the good work!
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Hi Henry,
I thought that your speech was very well organized and toned. You had good posture throughout the video and your pacing was great. One thing that caught my attention was the pause that you had at 3:14 right before you said “vastly.” That was well performed, well done. I don’t have any negative feedback to give, I think you nailed it. Good job.
Here is my link!
https://youtu.be/nCAlaP3Ccew
Hi Julia,
Thank you for sharing your speech! For your delivery, I enjoyed the tone of your voice and the pacing. I think that you could add one or two more small personal stories about your mother into your speech to enhance it. Also, perhaps work on additional eye contact with the camera, because from my angle, it appears that you are looking downward. Keep up the good work!
Hi Julia,
I really liked the tone and delivery of your speech. You made clear the positive impact that your mother has had in your life, and I thought the way you articulated that was really endearing. The one thing that I think needs some adjustment is the length of your speech. Although I think you hit all the marks for the content of your speech, you’re still a little shy of the 3-5 minute mark. Like Candace had mentioned, I think adding some personal stories would not only enhance your speech, but also add a bit more time to it. I think this could be a fairly simple fix, by just adding a few subpoints with examples to your outline, it would help to prep and bring your speech to the next level!
Here is my link!
https://youtu.be/ybU0j5h2E0U
Hi Candace,
Really well done. I liked how you began with a forward, which helped establish context and drawn the listener in. As for your speech, your tone and pacing underwrote the content and delivery of your speech, adding a level of earnestness –which was powerful. The only possible adjustment I could recommend is that it does go over that 3-5 minute recommendation. However, I don’t think your speech should be bottlenecked into this, as I think it should remain as you have it. Though I may have not known your father, I think your words hallmark his legacy and the positive impacts he had on your life.
Thank you so much Henry! Yes, I will definitely go back and look at my outline. All of those pauses were great, but it did add a lot of time to the speech.
Hi Candace! Your speech was very empowering. You were able to describe these memories of your father perfectly and set the moment just right. Your tone and delivery were very good, and the pace of things to you didn’t rush anything. Maybe you could just work on the length of the speech a little to tweak it and narrow it down to just a few of those key moments you shared? Other than that great job!
Thank you Julia-I appreciate your advice and I will work on it!
Hi Candace,
This was a really good dry run and a great story. I noticed for the better part of the video that you were very poised with your speaking and you didn’t really use any filler words throughout the entire speech. However, towards the end of the speech, you started to slip up a little bit but that’s understandable considering how long you were speaking for. But I could tell that you were passionate about the impact your father has had on you. Great speech!
Hi Henry,
I loved your speech! Wonderful content-I admire how you added realistic information about your grandfather and tied it into the conclusion. You balanced out your emotions with the delivery. I think that the rhythm and pacing were great. The only thing I can think of to improve is to perhaps introduce yourself at the beginning. You could choose so right at the beginning, or maybe after you end after the first few sentences “…one of those very important people to me was my grandfather.” At that point, for example say, “Hello, I’m Henry….etc, etc”. I think that mechanism could preserve your concise opening thoughts to the audience while also introducing yourself. Excellent work Henry!
My link:
https://youtu.be/qI-8puRoYyE
Hi Sam,
I think your speech was well done, it covered not only an influential person in your life but also personal struggles which made that person exemplary. I also liked how your speech had a narrative to it as well, your transition points flowed nicely. When it comes to things you could potentially adjust, I think your background was a little on the long side. I think either trimming that down or introducing your person sooner could be more beneficial for the listener. Those are some minor adjustments, but I think this is a really good dry run!
Hi Sam! I enjoyed listening to your speech. The introduction was very strong and you were able to explain everything. One thing I would say is maybe you could introduce the person you were speaking about sooner in your speech, like maybe before all of the background info even a name would be good to add. Once you add in the name of the person whom you will be discussing then the background info might make it easier to tie in. The length of your speech was perfect you did a great job on that, and also the delivery as it makes us audience more drawn in and feel those feelings you may have gone through.
Hi Sam, thank you for sharing your speech! Your comfort level with speaking and eye contact were both very good. As Julia mentioned, I was a little confused at first due to organization of the speech. Perhaps you could first introduce Dante, then state how he has helped you (providing some small story for each point). I wanted to hear more about how Dante was helping you-it seemed like you were generalizing a bit and it would be enjoyable to hear additional details. Keep up the good work!