Hi Wylie! I thought your topic was very important and relevant. You did a really good job at explaining the pros to adopting an animal from a shelter. I thought that the prop being your animal was also very smart. I think this created a personal relationship with the topic. Your speech seemed very well organized. One thing was that you used the word and a lot in your speech. It seemed a little awkward at times. I think you did a great job!
Hey Wylie, this is a great speech. Adopting from shelters is so important, and you make some clear points about why it matters. I do think you sound a little stilted at times, and you may want to consider taking a few breaths between sentences, as it seems as if you are holding your breath while you speak. Otherwise, this is a well-organized speech with obvious points that support your arguments. Well done!
I love this idea! It really is a big issue out there and I agree that a lot of people know about this, but choose not to listen to it. You did a great job delivering different points and you were well spoken, clear, and you explained the best reasons of why getting an animal from a shelter is better. I think one thing you could improve on is add a couple more stats or give a couple examples of where you can go to look for these shelters.
Hi Beanie! I really learned a lot by watching your speech. I had no idea this went back so far in history! I think you made a lot of good analogies that the audience could relate to. You also found common ground with your audience because everyone wants to be respected and heard. I think that your speech had a really nice flow to it with very positive energy. One thing is that maybe the conclusion could be direct in some way to really showcase your thesis.
I really like this topic and I wish something like this could be shown in schools! This topic is so important. I think you did a good job of telling us the history behind pronouns and how they have changed in the past. I also think you did a good job of making the audience feel comfortable by saying its okay if you mess up, as long as you’re trying. I can’t really think of something that could be improved, I think you hit everything on the rubric but maybe having a clear thesis and then restating it at the end!
You did a really great job explaining the basics of pronouns and how they have evolved over time. I liked how easy going your speech was in the sense that you made it very easy to follow. You had a lot of great points and it was awesome to see some history involved with it. I don’t think you need to change or improve too much, but as far as a prop goes I think either a poster board or slides would be best t show some of the nouns commonly used and where they can normally associate with.
I think you did a good job at choosing a topic not a lot of people would know about. I didn’t know there was a lifeguard shortage, I should have looked into that for a summer job! I also feel like you were very educated on the topic and have credibility since you are a lifeguard. Something I think could be improved is the length of the video by adding in the steps on how to become a lifeguard!
Hey! This is a really interesting issue that I didn’t know about, and I’m sure a lot of people don’t as well. I do think you could speak a little more clearly/loudly, as well as adding in more information about how management can fix this issue. You are pretty well under the time limit, and while you do get a lot of important information across, it would be good to add in more. What are some benefits of being a lifeguard? What is the job like? What is training like? This is a great topic that I’m excited to hear more on.
I honestly did not know that this was an issue and I find it interesting to hear and learn about. You had some great points in there for why lifeguarding is on a shortage and you talked about some great statistics on how many deaths per year happen. I think if you were to expand a little more on each of those points you spoke about would help you reach the time limit. I also don’t know how easy this is to find, but maybe you could add more with life guards regarding watching over beaches at lakes or oceans. Adding in a prop of some sort might help you lengthen the time so you can go over some visuals that you could add as-well.
Hi! I really thought that your speech was very insightful. This topic is very important. I could tell that you have a personal connection to the topic because of your connection with rugby. This gave your speech a very meaningful energy. You also had some great quotes by athletes explaining the danger of this injury. This was a really good source and made your speech more credible. I think you could work on using less filler words but overall you did a really great job.
I think your speech was very thought out and planned and I like how you had a slideshow! I learned a lot I didn’t know before and I think you picked a good topic that needs more recognition, like you said especially in schools and athletes who play contact sports. What I think you could do to improve the video is if you’re using your phone, flipping it horizontally so that you and your slideshow can both fit in the frame!
Hey there. I agree with Wylie- filming horizontally would definitely improve the viewing of the slideshow. In terms of content, you seem really knowledgeable and informed about the topic of C.T.E.s, and you establish credibility well. I would also recommend trying to cut back on the ums and pauses, which is something I also struggle with big time, as it will help improve the flow of your speech and getting your points across. Otherwise great job!
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https://youtu.be/uscrQaeLJCg
Hi Wylie! I thought your topic was very important and relevant. You did a really good job at explaining the pros to adopting an animal from a shelter. I thought that the prop being your animal was also very smart. I think this created a personal relationship with the topic. Your speech seemed very well organized. One thing was that you used the word and a lot in your speech. It seemed a little awkward at times. I think you did a great job!
Hey Wylie, this is a great speech. Adopting from shelters is so important, and you make some clear points about why it matters. I do think you sound a little stilted at times, and you may want to consider taking a few breaths between sentences, as it seems as if you are holding your breath while you speak. Otherwise, this is a well-organized speech with obvious points that support your arguments. Well done!
I love this idea! It really is a big issue out there and I agree that a lot of people know about this, but choose not to listen to it. You did a great job delivering different points and you were well spoken, clear, and you explained the best reasons of why getting an animal from a shelter is better. I think one thing you could improve on is add a couple more stats or give a couple examples of where you can go to look for these shelters.
https://youtu.be/WQlo1pHE8iM
Here y’all go. I know this take is definitely rambling, and any suggestions on props would be amazing.
Hi Beanie! I really learned a lot by watching your speech. I had no idea this went back so far in history! I think you made a lot of good analogies that the audience could relate to. You also found common ground with your audience because everyone wants to be respected and heard. I think that your speech had a really nice flow to it with very positive energy. One thing is that maybe the conclusion could be direct in some way to really showcase your thesis.
I really like this topic and I wish something like this could be shown in schools! This topic is so important. I think you did a good job of telling us the history behind pronouns and how they have changed in the past. I also think you did a good job of making the audience feel comfortable by saying its okay if you mess up, as long as you’re trying. I can’t really think of something that could be improved, I think you hit everything on the rubric but maybe having a clear thesis and then restating it at the end!
You did a really great job explaining the basics of pronouns and how they have evolved over time. I liked how easy going your speech was in the sense that you made it very easy to follow. You had a lot of great points and it was awesome to see some history involved with it. I don’t think you need to change or improve too much, but as far as a prop goes I think either a poster board or slides would be best t show some of the nouns commonly used and where they can normally associate with.
Here is my link:
https://youtu.be/aQpRGTpS0ls
I think you did a good job at choosing a topic not a lot of people would know about. I didn’t know there was a lifeguard shortage, I should have looked into that for a summer job! I also feel like you were very educated on the topic and have credibility since you are a lifeguard. Something I think could be improved is the length of the video by adding in the steps on how to become a lifeguard!
Hey! This is a really interesting issue that I didn’t know about, and I’m sure a lot of people don’t as well. I do think you could speak a little more clearly/loudly, as well as adding in more information about how management can fix this issue. You are pretty well under the time limit, and while you do get a lot of important information across, it would be good to add in more. What are some benefits of being a lifeguard? What is the job like? What is training like? This is a great topic that I’m excited to hear more on.
I honestly did not know that this was an issue and I find it interesting to hear and learn about. You had some great points in there for why lifeguarding is on a shortage and you talked about some great statistics on how many deaths per year happen. I think if you were to expand a little more on each of those points you spoke about would help you reach the time limit. I also don’t know how easy this is to find, but maybe you could add more with life guards regarding watching over beaches at lakes or oceans. Adding in a prop of some sort might help you lengthen the time so you can go over some visuals that you could add as-well.
https://youtu.be/YqbU3–uVNA
Hi! I really thought that your speech was very insightful. This topic is very important. I could tell that you have a personal connection to the topic because of your connection with rugby. This gave your speech a very meaningful energy. You also had some great quotes by athletes explaining the danger of this injury. This was a really good source and made your speech more credible. I think you could work on using less filler words but overall you did a really great job.
I think your speech was very thought out and planned and I like how you had a slideshow! I learned a lot I didn’t know before and I think you picked a good topic that needs more recognition, like you said especially in schools and athletes who play contact sports. What I think you could do to improve the video is if you’re using your phone, flipping it horizontally so that you and your slideshow can both fit in the frame!
Hey there. I agree with Wylie- filming horizontally would definitely improve the viewing of the slideshow. In terms of content, you seem really knowledgeable and informed about the topic of C.T.E.s, and you establish credibility well. I would also recommend trying to cut back on the ums and pauses, which is something I also struggle with big time, as it will help improve the flow of your speech and getting your points across. Otherwise great job!
Just realized this didn’t post as a reply, but this is for your video, Nick!